poems and whatever

Pandora’s Box

My box
Locked with locks
And spells of binding
So you will never find
What’s inside
Bound so well
That no one could tell
For the outside
Is just a shell
Contents only I confide in
To be safe
Because I prefer to save face
Please make hast
Just walk away
So that one day
All hope will not fade away





“I don’t care,” she said

When I see you
My anger immediately ensues
But just for a few minutes
Is my life sentence
To think that I could ever trust you
Must never be foolish
Yet I sit in the corner of the class
On your dunce stool
In the mist of a lingering past
How can I hate you so fast?
I wish they made casts for hearts
Because mine is starting to break again
To see you looking
So fake
That’s not how I remember you
To be
And now it seems
Like you care about nothing

I find all the poems on this page *32* very good and interesting. I can't write poems anymore. they seem to end up like this,

Looking through the crowd
Everyone screaming loud
The girl looks up to see
Him glancing down at her
She smiles and he looks away
Then her smile goes astray
She thought tonight would be great
Perfect even,
Now he won't even give a care to her
Her heart breaks to peices
Tears stream down her face
She stares off into the distance
Not having any emotions
Her heart and mind
Both taken quickly
By some boy she seems to 'love'
She doesn't understand him anymore

so many sad poems... but they're good!

and sweetblood, i love the line "How can I hate you so fast?" good one!

well, I guess I should post something...

Here's a song I wrote for my band, Edward and the Cullens. You guessed it, it's about Twilight from Edward's perspective around the time when he leaves her in New Moon.

Oh, I've made a mistake
The human heart can't take
The vicious love of a vampire
But Bella Swan
Even though I'm gone
For you my heart will catch on fire
It's like my newborn days
The chronic haze
Your abscence puts me in
But try as I might
Even I can't fight
As your eyes drag me in

And, oh, with you I feel alive
And, oh, without you in agony I writhe
And Bella Swan, I may be dead
But with you I swore my heart sped
It's permanently skipped a beat
Go ahead, bury me under six feet
Just to be with you

And, oh, you know I do this all to protect you
It's the only way I could've followed through
But it hurts so bad, and we're both so sad
That I'm losing sight of the purpose
Is it worth this?

And, oh, with you I feel alive
And, oh, without you in agony I writhe
And Bella Swan, I may be dead
But with you I swore my heart sped
It's permanently skipped a beat
Go ahead, bury me under six feet
Just to be with you

And Bella Swan you're my Breaking Dawn
Of the Eclipse, Eclipse of the New Moon
And last night at Twilight
I realized we were staring at the same starlight
Starlight

the end.

GREAT!! Really I loved it!!

Yay thanks! If you wanna hear it with music, go to our myspace. It's not up right now, but it should be soon...

www.myspace.com/edwardandthecullens1

I will!!
A new poem I just decided to write I don't know why

An empty room,
Filled with nothing but air
I wish you were here,
to catch the tears,
To make this edging pain go away,
Just to hear my heart stutter at the sound of your voice.
Back against the wall,
The thoughts of you are the only thing to keep me from the fall

Lovely poems!!!!!

alright that song that I posted on here is not up on myspace, if you wanna hear it to music... It's not perfect yet, but we're getting there.

www.myspace.com/edwardandthecullens1

You,
Your like my drug
I'm addicted to you.
Your voice.
The way you talk.
The way you smile.
The way you make me want to stay for awhile.
The way you play with my hair and kiss my neck.
The way you intwine your fingers with mine.
How you tell me you love me and will always care.
The way you say you'll always be there.
I love the way you kiss my lips.
How you hold my hips.
Everyday it is you I yearn to be with.
Until that day
I will always love the way you love me

Just another poem

Nice! I liked your rhymes in that. good job!

Thank you very much. I made another poem just now.

Six years gone by

When your feeling rotten
All sad and down,
When you feel like it's over
And you keep hitting the ground
Turn around,
I haven't forgotten you
Not the least bit.
You remain in my heart
Just as a kid
I remember the fun times we had.
Then things had to change.
Without you here things have been strange
Maybe if you come back I won't be constantly wearing a frown.
I love you.
Your my family.
A brother to call my own.
Please, why don't you just come home.

This poem was dedicated to my half-brother that lives down in Key-West Florida. I haven't seen him in Six years *Where I got my title for the poem* I really miss him and I talked to him because I posted a bulletin on myspace about how I loved this wrestler. Turns out we both have the same favorite wrestler. Then I told him that I loved him even though it's been forever. Then he said he'll try to convince his mom to let him come up next summer. I literally started crying i was so happy

Aw! That was cute! It was really good, except this time it seemed like you tried to hard to rhyme, like it was forced. It's better to let it flow naturally rather than to force it into a rhyme scheme. but yeah it was pretty good everywhere except that

Thank you for the advice. Thats one thing I admire about you. You can tell people the truth about there writing skills!! Thanks.. Oh I changed a line I don't know if it helps though.

why thank you! i like being a reveiwer. if i can't write, then i can at least give great feedback!

hey whoa, maybe i'm crazy, but i could've sworn there was another poem in here and i posted a really long bit of advice about it, but now it's gone?!?!

hm.

Well I know this is a double post, but I wanted this separate cuz this is actually a poem I wrote while driving the other day. It's kinda weird.

The rain is cold.
It stings my skin as it strikes.
But I have only one regret:
I am alone.
In the shadow of your abscence
It becomes harder to speak.
My throat swells
My tongue tightens
My lips clench
I don't know what it is that's inside me
But it doesn't want to come out.

I think I might add more to that, but that's what it is for now.

Yeah it just likee disappeared!! It was mine!
Urghhh all my posts keep disappearing. D:

Oh and I like your little poem thingg!!

thank you! Did you see what I posted after your poem? if not, then i'll retype it, but I don't wanna if you already read it.

I think I saw it,, But repost it again.

Feeling Helpless

He reminds me of you,
I had to leave because him,
I want to hate him for making me go
It's not like me to walk away,
I couldn't stand there watching him.
Thinking of you.
It's getting rough.
All the times we spent.
Are becoming faded.
It's hard to remember your face.
All that remains in my memory that pins to you is your eyes.
Remarkable.
Amazing.
Beautiful.
Your eyes.
Crystal blue like the skys we used to watch together
I could drift into your eyes; get lost in them and never want to be found.
Never want to be pput back onto solid ground.
Missing you.
I hate it.
Even if I did put you off because I didn't want to miss you.
I wouldn't be able to forget you.
I wouldn't be able to live without knowing I hurt you.
I wouldn't be able to live knowing that you might be with another girl.
I love you to death and even afterwards.
Love you till eternity and then some.
I just feeel so helpless. I would go miles and miles just to see you again.
But I guess it just doesn't work that way...

Take this key to the heart

Broken peices of the heart
Mending sorrows will not start
Chipping memories
Fading away
Smiling like nothing is wrong
The heart is broken
Promises are gone
Love forever is now withdrawn

Woo! I liked both of those. I especially liked the last line of the 2nd one and the line in the 1st one about pinning the eyes to the memory...

But alright, in condensed form, I said in that other post to be more particular about verb choice. It really makes a difference if you think about the mood you're trying to create and match verbs to it, like if you want a peaceful vibe, say "the notes floated from the speakers" or if you want a crazy one say "the chords blasted through the speakers." I think you should try to avoid general verbs like "walked" and "drive" and things like that... Tell me HOW they walked, HOW they drove. Did that make sense?

One more thing, about your first poem, I think you should go into more detail about the eyes. You say they're amazing and remarkable, but I want to picture them.

Okay thankyou for the advice. I edited the first one but I proably didn't change much. Heres another poem that I made.

They won't see me break

They won't see me like that
I don't let them see me cry,
For a fear I might die
Of embarrasment.
I can remember the words and not the voice
But the words make me think of him
Then when I do think of him I feel a lump in my throat
My eyes start to water and rush down my cheeks like a river swiftly flowing.
I swallow the lump and bravely push back the tears.
I'm losing this fight against myself
My grip is becoming weaker as you tell me it's okay to cry
I turn around and run as fast as I can push myself
Wishing to not see your face
Wishing to be held in his welcoming arms again.
I scream back at you,
"You will not see me break!! You will NEVER see me break"
My voice fades as I get farther from where you stand

Staring Aimlessly
A blank peice of paper
Don't know what to write
Staring at the red margin
Reminding me of red lights
Flashing in my head
Remembering the darkness
The music that blared through the air that filled the silence
The two of us just unwilling to even care
We slip in the the parking lot
Gripping hands held tight
Closer to our destination were gettiing.
Side by side we stand
Lips clashing together
Now I'm falling down
Your hands slip around my waist
Mine grasp at your face
You stare across the table
Eyes burning intently into mine
I miss the conversations
The short talks on the phone
I wish we were together so I can call this place my home

Oh my goodness. I absolutely love the 2nd one!!!!!! My favorite part is the "thetwo of us just unwilling to even care, We slip in the parking lot, Gripping hands held tight"

that part is perfect. The rest is amazing too, but that stuck out to me. Awesome job!

THANKYOU!! lol
Thats pretty much from experience.

I loved the second one, but if you don't mind, I just have a bit of mild criticism.

First off in the line, "Closer to our destination were gettiing," we're should have an apostrophe. Also, it would help the flow much better if you used some form of punctuation. And remember, not every line has to be capitalized!

Otherwise, it was very very good. Keep up the great work!